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my heart has been broken
it is cracking under so much pressure

my wounds go deep
so deep into my flesh

my heart burning
It's aching i can feel it exploding.

i'm going to die
things are turning darker
all i can see is my life fading.

i failed,
failed like i always do

it's over now
i feel my pain slowly draining.
i feel empty and lifeless as fade into the dark.
This is something diffrent for me to submit, but i had to get my feelings down

:iconelfmuse: she helped me with this poem :)
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shealpha1 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Its really good you did good :)
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012
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PuzzledHeartBox Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012
Not bad, I especially like the ending. It pretty much summarizes life, it's struggle, it's pain. And then the final moment of rest before the great end.
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Thoraax Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2008
dont feel crap hun :) just keep a smile ok :)
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lasciviousness Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2008   Photographer
:cries: omg (shutters) idk what to say?? i feel so crappy :backstab: sorry
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BloodyDesire Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2008
:confused:
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BloodyDesire Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
good for a start :nod:
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ElfMuse Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
Hmm i think it's rather well for your first poem.
If you need a little bit help i would be happy to redo your poem for you so you can compare them and see wat i change,but then again everyone has his own writing style :)
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Thoraax Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
i would love your help hun :)
if i am going to be getting my thoughts on paper i will need your help :)
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ElfMuse Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2008
haha :),well i'm on msn :)
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